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1001nightspress

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 6, 2013 10:02 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I don't think you're ready for a review--you need at a minimum a good proofreader, which makes me wonder if you also need an editor. (Have the proofreader check your blurb, too.)

You need a cover designed for an ebook.

As for whether the story is good, what was the reaction of your beta readers? That should be a good indication.

To get reviews, you could try sending a review copy to book bloggers in your genre. However, do NOT send one that has not been proofread. Reviewer blogs will give you an honest opinion, and they do take things like that into account. Remember, when you self-publish, you're telling the public that you've fulfilled the same duties a traditional publisher has--either you did them yourself, or you hired others to help you. But you can't just skip crucial steps and get the same quality product. Respect the book-buying public, and they will respect you.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 6, 2013 10:56 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I have had a look 'inside' your book.

Their names were Yoi and Zeldian, good and evil, balance between the two.

That sentence doesn't make any sense to me. Up to the second comma, makes sense, but the 'balance between the two' doesn't. I kind of know what you're trying to say. I think.
Your next line (the third) has a mistake in it. You have written 'disturb' when you mean 'disturbed' So I probably would have moved on from your book at that point. A mistake in the third line isn't good. This is why you are not getting people reviewing it.

If you cannot afford a proof-reader, then use a 'TEXT to SPEECH program, (there are lots you can download for free) set it to read your book back to you, very slowly. The very slowly part is important, as you will hear the mistakes you have made, and can correct them.

I would also change the cover to look like an eBook cover, and not the jacket from a physical book.

Hope this helps you.

Good luck.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 6, 2013 1:41 PM   in response to: Malcolm Higgins in response to: Malcolm Higgins
 
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Thnx. Making corrections on that part. But the "balance between the two" does make sense. You have to read the story to understand it.
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Posted: May 6, 2013 3:04 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I need to know if it is good.

Not in its current state.

The cover is a huge problem since it is a front and back cover. It desperately needs an edit. If you fix those things, then maybe it could become "good".
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 6, 2013 3:30 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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It may make some kind of logical sense, but it makes no grammatical sense. Not in English, anyway.

Is English your first language?

You really don't want reviews of this hot mess yet. You need to get it sorted first.
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Posted: May 6, 2013 8:18 PM   in response to: 2davidvandyke in response to: 2davidvandyke
 
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First I came on this thread for a review and advice , not for some crazy people hiding behind screen names to talk bad about my writing when u haven't read the entir story. Yes I made few typos but I fixed them and waiting for it to post.


And don't sit here and questioned my native language

People now of these days...

Edited by: kdpadmin on May 7, 2013 6:25 AM

Malcolm Higgins

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Posted: May 7, 2013 3:33 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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WOW!!!

First I came on this thread for a review and advice , not for some crazy people hiding behind screen names to talk bad about my writing when u haven't read the entir story. Yes I made few typos but I fixed them and waiting for it to post.

PEOPLE ARE GIVING YOU ADVICE. YOU JUST DON'T LIKE THE ADVICE YOU ARE GETTING. CALLING PEOPLE WHO BOTHER TO TRY AND HELP YOU 'CRAZY' IS 'CRAZY' IN ITSELF! WHY ON EARTH WOULD YOU DO THAT?

TAKE A LOOK AT HOW MANY TYPOS IN YOUR SENTENCES ABOVE. AFTER 'ADVICE' YOU HAVE A SPACE BEFORE THE COMMA. YOU HAVE WRITTEN 'U' INSTEAD OF 'YOU' AND DID YOU MEAN 'ENTIR' OR DID YOU MEAN 'ENTIRE'

And don't sit here and questioned my native language , you rude bastard.
People now of these days...

CALLING SOMEONE A RUDE BASTARD IS JUST WRONG. I WISHED YOU LUCK YESTERDAY. I TAKE THAT BACK NOW.
I CERTAINLY WOULDN’T PAY MONEY FOR YOUR BOOK. PLEASE LET ME KNOW WHEN YOUR BOOK IS FREE TO DOWNLOAD, AS I WOULD LIKE TO DOWNLOAD IT. READ IT. THEN GIVE A NO-HOLDS-BARRED REVIEW FOR YOU. LIKE YOU’VE ASKED FOR.
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Posted: May 7, 2013 4:26 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I need to know if it is good.

The above is from your original post. If you can't handle an honest critique from people who know what they're talking about, asking things like this is the wrong approach.

This is not the special snowflake forum.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 5:02 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Marquis, please settle down.

These are experts providing you with some great advice and you're taking offense to that advice.

If you will not accept the experts advice, then your experience with your ebook will be: it sits there on Amazon and draws cyber dust into obscurity.

I'm new here, and surely not an expert so my advice does not carry much weight - but - you should read, comprehend and implement what these other Authors have written.
Guess what happens when you do that? Your product improves immensely.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 5:08 AM   in response to: Malcolm Higgins in response to: Malcolm Higgins
 
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First of I'm in a forum and yes I used U instead of you...I'm in a forum.

Oh i emphasized 'I'm in a forum" again.

Why do I need to talk proper in forum when we as people don't in society. The only time we do is when we at our jobs, handling events, or any professional ventures.

I know the difference between criticism and someone being rude.

RUDE -discourteous or impolite, especially in a deliberate way: a rude reply

CRITICISM -the act of passing judgment as to the merits of anything.

MERIT -claim to respect and praise

DO I need to say more.

Like I said there were typos I did not see after reading it over and over.

Marquis Mills

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 5:11 AM   in response to: Mike Beach in response to: Mike Beach
 
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Mike I understand that but you should do it in a professional way.

If they are authors and experienced, then they should criticize it in a civil response....
Marquis Mills

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Posted: May 7, 2013 5:14 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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"This is not the special snowflake forum."

The above comment speaks for itself. Find the definition for it and read it.

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Posted: May 7, 2013 5:19 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Marquis said: "Why do I need to talk proper in forum when we as people don't in society. The only time we do is when we at our jobs, handling events, or any professional ventures."

And then Marquis said: "Mike I understand that but you should do it in a professional way."

You asked for advice. You got it. Even Amazon has marked this thread as "Answered."

Best of luck to you.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 5:31 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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oh boy... I am so out of this thread!
You are so rude.End of subject.
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Posted: May 7, 2013 5:32 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
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This forum is always a sure thing for a good laugh when I take a break from writing. Thanks for the chuckle...adios!
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Posted: May 7, 2013 5:41 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Rude people get no where in life...
Malcolm Higgins

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Posted: May 7, 2013 5:56 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Marquis Mills What is your first language?
Only, Rude people get no where in life...
Should read…
Rude people get nowhere in life...
landdk

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 6:04 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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"do it in a professional way" So... just exactly what would be the "professional way" to call somebody a "rude bastard" after they made an attempt to help you?

(I hope I have asked this question in a "professional way".)
Marquis Mills

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Posted: May 7, 2013 6:19 AM   in response to: landdk in response to: landdk
 
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Malcolm I thought you were done and for the new blogger, don't attack me without understanding the situation.
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Posted: May 7, 2013 9:39 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
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I haven't done the 'look inside' as I see a few names on here who have already commented who I know to have good heads on their shoulders, so I won't comment on it structurally as you've been given that advice already.

As was pointed out- yes, your cover is incorrectly formatted for an ebook lisiting. Why does it matter? Because it makes you look like a hack. It's about as bad as juts putting up an image with no title or author name. It's amateur, and gives possible readers a bad impression.

You have a 110 page book priced at $9.99. If you fixed the things mentioned above, and priced it competitively at, say, $2.99 or $3.99, you'd most likely get far more sales, and some reviews would follow. Why do you expect folks to pay $10 for a work from an 'unknown' when they can have their pick of other books that interest them for less than half the price? Something to think about...

You'll also find that calling other users on here names is a sure-fire way to need help, ask for it, and find that no one answers you anymore.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 10:49 AM   in response to: Kara Haskins in response to: Kara Haskins
 
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I appreciate your criticism but your friends too it to another level but you on the other gave me what I wanted.

Thank you very much for answering my question without disrespecting me.

:)

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Posted: May 7, 2013 10:51 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I had no clue that I overpriced it.
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Posted: May 7, 2013 11:25 AM   in response to: crazywriterlady in response to: crazywriterlady
 
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This is not the special snowflake forum.

I'm am so going to get that on a t-shirt one day.
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Posted: May 7, 2013 3:43 PM   in response to: andresanthomas in response to: andresanthomas
 
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Me too, LOL.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 4:30 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Marquis:

You've been extremely disturbed by the criticism you've requested in this forum, so, before I post, I'm going to ask you this: do you or do you not want an honest critique? Before I owned the company I own now, which is an ebook formatting/conversion service, I was a book reviewer for Sphere (fantasy and sci-fi), in the early 90's. So: do you want an honest critique, or are you only interested in hearing what you want to hear? I'll tell you what I think, but I'm not going to do so if you are solely giving lip-service to the idea of honest criticism. I'll warn you in advance: this book needs a ton of work. If you're interested in hearing what I have to say, I'll say it. If not, I won't waste my time. Your choice.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 7, 2013 7:41 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
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I read your look inside and liked it, your price is good. And your cover looks good, I don't know about the size is all. I'm not a reviewer and right now don't have time to read much. Every new writer I've seen here get the same treatment you have got. So take it on the chin and just look at your book again and if you feel it is good laugh it off and be happy you can. Mine may not be so good, but their is some who like them and that's all that maters to me.

Edited by: 76year2 on May 7, 2013 7:41 PM
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Posted: May 7, 2013 8:34 PM   in response to: 76year2 in response to: 76year2
 
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Agreed. If they don't like the book, they don't and everyone has a different writing style.

Yes I had typos in it, a mistake which I thought I fixed before posting it . But a lot love the story so I'm not taking anything to heart some of these bloggers say.

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Posted: May 7, 2013 8:39 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Testing...

Ah, it posted. Cool.

While some of the members here may be bloggers, they're also authors and publishers.

I believe you stated that you've only had one sale of this book, and its ranking is below a million, indicating that's the only sale of it. You asked for help.

Your book didn't have just a couple of typos.

From the Look Inside:

"A young woman stands on the edge a large black rock protruding from the ocean, staring at the sunset." - At the very least, there's a missing "of" in that sentence, between "edge" and "a".

"She is athletic and curvy who has beautiful brown skin..." - Removing the "who has" and replacing it with "with" would help that sentence make far better sense.

You don't use quotes to indicate dialogue at all. That's going to be really, really off-putting to most readers, who are accustomed to dialogue being contained with quotes.

"She joined the military at a very young age, just barely past adolescent." - "Adolescence" would be the correct word in that particular sentence.

"...tide tightly by brown rope." - "Tied". A 'tide" is the rise and fall of sea levels.

Those are just a very few of the things I noticed. There are many others, and I think it's probably pretty safe to say that's why your book isn't selling.

Edited by: gldrummond on May 7, 2013 8:39 PM
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Posted: May 7, 2013 8:41 PM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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Not being rude but my answer was answered above. Again there is a difference between criticism and making rude responses.

Problems were fixed and now it's good to go.

Yes you are a professional and know your stuff but I just wanted to tell a story that is a good story.

Criticism is some times bias for it all depends on the audience.

Also if you are going to make a comment such as my book needs tone of work, read it first and then I will respect your opinion but I can't because you have not read it but assume based on a few errors shown in the sample.

Edited by: Marquis Mills on May 7, 2013 8:45 PM

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Posted: May 7, 2013 8:59 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Well, there's your answer, Hitch. ;)

Good luck with your sales, Marquis. :)
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Posted: May 8, 2013 12:51 AM   in response to: andresanthomas in response to: andresanthomas
 
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Do it, you'll make a fortune. I know I'd buy one!
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Posted: May 8, 2013 1:36 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Well, Marquis:

Do I understand your post to mean that you expect me to buy your book and read the entire thing? Is that right? Prior to providing you with the constructive criticism you requested? I'm sorry, but I don't need to buy the entire book; I can see most of the issues with the writing from the free sample.

Here's the constructive criticism: I wouldn't buy it. I wouldn't take it if free, because the huge number of grammatical and punctuation errors--not typos--would make me skip right past it. This is why your book is not selling; this is why you have only had one sale. GLDrummond already pointed out some of the immediate issues. However, you have quite a lot of problems in the book. You are either willing to hear the truth or you are not. What I'm saying to you isn't "opinion" on the quality of the story-telling; what I'm trying to say to you is that the sheer number of off-putting errors means that people who enjoy reading are not ever going to get to your story, because all the mistakes will stop them from buying the book. Like your response to one poster, who pointed out a grammar error--"it makes sense. You have to read it, and then you'll understand it." That's not viable. People don't read what you intended. They only read what you actually put on the page. And telling someone to read the entire book in order to "get" one badly-written sentence makes, forgive me, no sense.

Your sentence structure is very poor, frequently omitting verbs and nouns, sometimes both. You mix tenses (past and present) from sentence to sentence; sometimes in the same sentence. I started to copy and paste a bunch of examples in here, but GL is right: I already have my answer. You're not interested in what's actually wrong; you apparently only wanted people to post here and praise it. I'd strongly recommend that you take some Creative Writing classes; then you should seek out a critique group, and learn to take constructive criticism. Quite bluntly, you have a lot of editing and rewriting to do, because right now, the writing is getting in the WAY of the storytelling. I'm sorry, but that is the situation. Your story might be great, but no one is going to find out, because the blurb and the free sample are of less-than-stellar quality. You cannot have a brilliant story told badly; people won't plow through really poorly-written material to "find" a good story. You have to entice them with at least good, if not great, quality of writing as well. At the moment, your creative writing skills need training and rework. That's my best advice to you. I'm quite certain you won't listen to it; and that's why you don't see a lot of other people adding material to this thread--because of your responses, indicating that you are not willing to hear what people really think about the quality of your writing. I can recommend several very worthwhile critique groups if you are interested, although I don't expect a positive response to that, either.

You should try to remember that what you have done is create a product that is now for sale to the general public. It's not art; it's not your heart's labor; it's a simple product that's for sale. Just like a vacuum cleaner, if people don't like what they see, they won't buy it. Right now, you have not put the best "face" on your product, and that, quite simply, is why it is not selling. You're now an entrepreneur, and you need to consider your product just like any other businessman. If your product isn't selling, you need to ask yourself, truthfully, why. If you are not able to handle the (thus far) very polite criticism you've received on this forum, then you are most certainly not ready for the type of reviews you'll receive.

Best of luck to you.

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 8, 2013 3:20 AM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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the sheer number of off-putting errors means that people who enjoy reading are not ever going to get to your story, because all the mistakes will stop them from buying the book.

Jeff Bezos will have much to answer for, when he goes to meet his Maker, for having unleased the KDP (and especially KDP Select) upon the world.
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Posted: May 8, 2013 6:00 AM   in response to: andresanthomas in response to: andresanthomas
 
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Thanks! My cut on each sale is only 10%. ;)
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Good, honest stuff there, but I'm afraid you and gldrummond are wasting your "breath". Heartfelt critiques are seen as attacks, and creative writing classes are wasted if one doesn't have the basics of English down.

He either won't or can't see past the birth of his wonderful baby. It's not uncommon here, or on other sites. "Everyone" one may love the story, as he claims, but one sale says it all.
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Posted: May 8, 2013 6:58 AM   in response to: Kara Haskins in response to: Kara Haskins
 
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' If you fixed the things mentioned above, and priced it competitively at, say, $2.99 or $3.99, you'd most likely get far more sales, and some reviews would follow. '

Please do note I am not suggesting you ONLY drop your price!
Marquis Mills

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 8, 2013 10:04 AM   in response to: Kara Haskins in response to: Kara Haskins
 
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Would you relax....I have a job you know and I working on it!!!!
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Posted: May 8, 2013 10:23 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I know this is just a forum but if you can't be bothered to correct glaring errors such as "I working on it", it doesn't bode well for your writing. Is it that you can't see the mistakes you make or do you just not care?
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He either won't or can't see past the birth of his wonderful baby. It's not uncommon here, or on other sites. "Everyone" one may love the story, as he claims, but one sale says it all.

Thanks, crazywriterlady, but I think that he literally doesn't see it. His responses indicate that he thinks he has typos, not real structural issues with sentences, paragraphs, and storytelling sequencing issues. For example, he has these Gods fighting over "Nirvana," which is, some sentences later, the 'afterlife." But this is before the "good" God creates the world that has life. If there's no life in the beginning of the story, what's the "after"-life for? Who is it for? The Good God creates the world, and life (his words) after the two Gods have this big fight over this Afterlife place. But it seems peculiar that they would fight over an afterlife that they don't need, as there aren't any other living beings at the time. I mean, that's one small example. The tenses thing is really difficult to read, as are all the sentences with missing verbs and nouns. I don't know if it's the result of too much text-messaging or working in a non-cradle language, but it constantly interrupts the narrative flow, making it impossible, to me, to get "into" the story.

I think that this is a very rough draft that has not had its six months of rewrites and edits. I think that the author got excited when he finished the story, as many first-time authors do, and published prematurely. (Premature pre-publication!). This simply requires one or two major self-edits by the author, and he might be very well served by a thorough edit by at least a line editor, if not a developmental editor. That's my two cents. We all know it's like quitting smoking, or dieting: he'll do it or he won't. All we can do is give some input. We can't "force" him to fix the book. ;-)

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Marquis Mills

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 8, 2013 7:43 PM   in response to: Msgris in response to: Msgris
 
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You know what the hell I meant crazywriterlady!!!!!!!

FYI

I was typing fast earlier.

Oh and if it makes you feel better.

I typing fast earlier.

Happy?

Edited by: Marquis Mills on May 8, 2013 8:21 PM
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Posted: May 8, 2013 8:08 PM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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When you use my words, make sure you QUOTE me.

Edited by: Marquis Mills on May 8, 2013 8:09 PM
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Posted: May 8, 2013 9:21 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Your book is perfect. Change nothing. Anyone who finds something to criticize is either a "grammar nazi" or a jealous competitor.

All you need is a lucky break or lots of advertising and promotion, and you'll make it big.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 1:43 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Marquis:

You and your rip off company can go somewhere else you "ANAL" crazy lady.

You mean my "rip off company" that a) does NOT offer editing services of any kind, and thus has absolutely NO financial interest in doing anything with your book, and b) produces books for Pulitzer winners, NYTimes and International bestsellers, as well as Oprah booklist selection authors? THAT "rip off company?" You should do some more research before you lash out.

I stopped by here again to see if there was anyone who needed help. As usual, it was a waste of time, and I blame myself for wasting it. Your ridiculously out-of-proportion responses simply indicate to everyone here that you've never done any serious writing, or you'd be well accustomed to far tougher critiques from critique groups, beta readers and editors by now, not to mention rejection letters from literary agents and publishers. What has been said to you here has been extremely kind and very nicely worded, so as not to hurt your feelings. A real critique group would have been far tougher on you, as would a creative writing class.

If you don't understand that a proper critique has nothing to do with how people feel, and is all about how poor the sentences are constructed, then there isn't any helping you. You've decided that for some reason, everyone who's tried to help you on this forum is "biased" or "mean" or "out to get you" for reasons I'm sure are clear to you and none of which are clear to any of us. None of us know you; we have absolutely nothing to gain by trying to help you; none of us earns any money in editing, so what, exactly, do you think we're "biased" about?

You seem to have convinced yourself that you were "fast typing" and that somehow, that excuses the fact that the prologue, at the very least, is unreadably bad. (Which is how I know a "lot" about the two deities in your story--you "infodump" the whole plotline in the prologue. That's what I read in the "look inside the book." Isn't that what you asked everyone to do? To read the free sample, and give you feedback? Everything I said to crazywriterlady is in the first five sentences of the prologue, each of which has at least two grammar and punctuation errors, and not less than one tense error.) Correct grammar and sentence structure isn't opinion or emotion, it's about writing well enough so that people can read your story. I'm sorry that you don't understand enough about writing to know that when you make a book difficult to read because of all the mistakes, it means that you won't get read. Which by now, I would think you would understand from that ONE sale problem of yours. Apparently not.

So, sure, you're right. That one sale means NOTHING. I suggest you run out and buy hundreds of dollars of Facebook and Google advertising, to drive traffic to that book. All it needs is some exposure, and then it will be no doubt a bestseller, so you can come back here and laugh in our faces. Good luck with that. I'm not wasting any more of my time with someone who is, literally, sitting there with his fingers in his ears saying "la-la-la-la-la-la-la" so he won't hear anything he doesn't want to hear.

Sorry I bothered to come by this forum again. You'd think I'd learn that it's not worth the aggravation.

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Posted: May 9, 2013 2:09 AM   in response to: 1001nightspress in response to: 1001nightspress
 
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andreasanthomas:

Your book is perfect. Change nothing. Anyone who finds something to criticize is either a "grammar nazi" or a jealous competitor.

(Two thumbs up).

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 2:46 AM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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Marquis,

You are clearly a sensitive individual ill-suited to the level of rejection inherent in being an author. Look around you - everyone posting on here has suffered sometimes harsh criticism or rejection in their quest to become a writer. You will need to develop a tougher skin if you hope to make it as an author. I have read the forum posts that prompted you to get angry and found them to be as polite as could be expected. I am still baffled at your emotional reaction to the criticism and feedback you received.

Let me rephrase the feedback you have been getting in this forum in hopefully clearer terms - the issues in your book are not typos or a matter of taste. I have also read the introduction and unfortunately the grammar has so many problems that I couldn't understand what you were writing. Note that this is objective feedback, not subjective - the grammar is, by any measure, not at a publishable level. You need to practice more or hire a proofreader.

English is clearly not your first language so you need to accept criticism from those for whom it is. I speak fluent Japanese but would never consider writing a book in Japanese - and even if I did, I would prepare myself for the honest feedback I would get, in the hope that it would help me produce a better draft.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 3:25 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Admit it, you wrote your own 5 star review! In your only review it has the same problem as your posts here, grammatical errors and *a missing word*! Since you say you type too fast and this is your problem, perhaps when you're writing reviews you should slow down a bit.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 5:26 AM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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Lol, oops I used a acronym that I and others use in a text message.

The plot is not revealed in the prologue. I laughed when you said that and calling me a "info-dump" is ironic due to that last response you've gave me.

Criticize the plot when you read the book.

Can you give me a summary of the story ?

Can you name one of the continents in my story?

Probably not....

You call my writing confusing but you understand it?

I don't get it that....

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Posted: May 9, 2013 5:26 AM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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Lol, oops I used a acronym that I and others use in a text message.

The plot is not revealed in the prologue. I laughed when you said that and calling me a "info-dump" is ironic due to that last response you've gave me.

Criticize the plot when you read the book.

Can you give me a summary of the story ?

Can you name one of the continents in my story?

Probably not....

You call my writing confusing but you understand it?

I don't get it that....

Marquis Mills

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Posted: May 9, 2013 5:29 AM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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Lol, oops I used a acronym that I and others use in a text message.

The plot is not revealed in the prologue. I laughed when you said that and calling me a "info-dump" is ironic due to that last response you've gave me.

Criticize the plot when you read the book.

Can you give me a summary of the story ?

Can you name one of the continents in my story?

Probably not....

You call my writing confusing but you understand it?

I don't get it that....

Marquis Mills

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 5:30 AM   in response to: 1001nightspress in response to: 1001nightspress
 
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Thank you
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Posted: May 9, 2013 6:29 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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First I came on this thread for a review and advice , not for some crazy people hiding behind screen names to talk bad about my writing when u haven't read the entir story. Yes I made few typos but I fixed them and waiting for it to post. And don't sit here and questioned my native language you rude bastard. People now of these days...

Hahahahah screen names? Here's my author page. http://www.amazon.com/David-VanDyke/e/B008EZHPC4/ref=ntt_athr_dp_pel_1

You'll notice the name on your screen is the same as the name on my books, except for the "2" because someone else has registered the name without the number. I'm not hiding.

I did not need to read the "entir" story to see it needs work. You asked for feedback, you got it. And the question about your native language was meant kindly, though now you have forfeited all kindness. If English is your native language, then you really need to look for another line of work.

Booknookbiz and others: Pearls before swine, baby.

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Posted: May 9, 2013 8:16 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Go on, admit it, your really Andy Kauffman! This is really just some great big spoof that's heralding your return. You are pure gold LOL!!!!
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Posted: May 9, 2013 8:24 AM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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Hitch, 'twas I, but I'm sure she'd share my sentiments.

You can't help people who aren't open to being helped. cf. Dorothy Parker on horticulture.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 8:47 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Congratulations your second review, or should I say, the first review you haven't written yourself, should appear on Amazon any time now. Congratulations, you got what you wished for xxxx
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Posted: May 9, 2013 9:26 AM   in response to: Msgris in response to: Msgris
 
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Wow You guys are really wrong about everything.

Why I even bothered to post on here...

Peter, there is nothing sensitive about me at all. What you perceive is not even close...LOL

Oh and the review is actually from a real person and not me...........
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Posted: May 9, 2013 9:30 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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You asked for a review, now you've got one on, now go away!

Edited by: Msgris on May 9, 2013 9:30 AM
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Posted: May 9, 2013 10:13 AM   in response to: 2davidvandyke in response to: 2davidvandyke
 
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Funny how the sarcasm went totally over his head.

OP, it's not very nice to criticize authors who are actually selling books (and I can attest that David's are good ones), when they try to provide the review you asked for.

We are professionals here, and we like to see others behave in a like manner, which means proper spelling, punctuation and word usage. This is not a situation where text-speech is appropriate.

Now, I'm going to put on my fire-proof suit, cause I know I'm going to get flamed.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 11:20 AM   in response to: Msgris in response to: Msgris
 
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I find that funny when you're in my thread telling me to go away.

Hehe..... You're so arrogant...all of you except for those and they know who they are. You all are the same, fueled with too much power and pride, quick to label something without really understanding. Conservative, you guys really are and nothing else. It was clear to me when I read and analyzed each response way before for those who know who they are.

Get a life and stop posting here....I would rather read chicken scratch then read each post.

Do you guys complain all the time because from what I read, you guys and again not all, must have boring lives. You guys are probably envious of the authors that actually became successful while on the other hand, you guys did not. Don't talk foolishness until you have a movie or over 100 reviews.

Maybe then I might take you all more serious.

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Posted: May 9, 2013 11:30 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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You (general "you") don't have to have 100 reviews and a movie made from one of your books in order to know how to write a coherent sentence.

My 14-year-old daughter is able to write coherent sentences. :)
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Posted: May 9, 2013 11:32 AM   in response to: crazywriterlady in response to: crazywriterlady
 
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"We are professionals here, and we like to see others behave in a like manner, which means proper spelling, punctuation and word usage. This is not a situation where text-speech is appropriate."

I have not,except for one, have seen anything professional.

Do you guys really know the definitions of some of the words you use.

So called experience authors who bicker. Get out of the "Narcissistic state" and come back to reality.

By the way tell me how you felt when your first book was not what you hoped for it to be?

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Posted: May 9, 2013 11:34 AM   in response to: gldrummond in response to: gldrummond
 
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"We are professionals here, and we like to see others behave in a like manner, which means proper spelling, punctuation and word usage. This is not a situation where text-speech is appropriate."

I have not,except for one, had seen anything professional.

Do you guys really know the definitions of some of the words you use.

So called experience authors who bicker. Get out of the "Narcissistic state" and come back to reality.

By the way tell me how you felt when your first book was not what you hoped for it to be?

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Posted: May 9, 2013 11:47 AM   in response to: gldrummond in response to: gldrummond
 
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If its incoherent then tell me why you are able to respond back if you don't understand it.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 11:49 AM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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YOU WANTED A REVIEW, I BOUGHT YOUR BOOK AND HAVE REVIEWED IT ON AMAZON, GO READ IT!!!!! You got what you wanted conversation over!
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Posted: May 9, 2013 11:58 AM   in response to: Msgris in response to: Msgris
 
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I did not tell you to buy my book, you made that choice.

Reading that response has made it clear to me that someone has anger issues.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 12:06 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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FYI , a random person read and understood it .


:0 OMG!!!!!!

Ha haaaa

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Posted: May 9, 2013 12:23 PM   in response to: gldrummond in response to: gldrummond
 
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My 14-year-old daughter is able to write coherent sentences.

My 9 year old (3rd grade) can too. And she knows the difference between there, they're and their. My 6 year old has to and two down, she's working on too.

Just sayin'.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 12:28 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I can tell whether something's incoherent, or not. That would be why. :)
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Posted: May 9, 2013 12:44 PM   in response to: gldrummond in response to: gldrummond
 
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Do you all hear yourselves ?

Because truly I am laughing at every response you make. Really trying to compare me to a kid.


LMFAO!!!!!!

I'm about to cry ,laughing so hard.

What a endless debate this is....

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Posted: May 9, 2013 12:59 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Let's see, you came to this forum for a reason.

Since you asked for "help" because you've only sold one copy, the logical deduction is that you came here because you believed the people here could help you.

You posted, asked for help, and people responded with the intention of helping you.

Almost everyone who responded pointed out issues, and you've basically blown each of them off by insulting them.

It's a little difficult for all of us to be "jealous" of someone who has only now sold 2 whole copies. I think most of us here, regardless of our rankings, number of reviews, or whether a Hollywood studio is salivating over buying rights to make a movie of our work, have sold more than 2 copies.

All of which implies that either A) your feelings are hurt, or B) you really don't believe anything's wrong with your book, but with readers for not buying it.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 1:24 PM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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do you or do you not want an honest critique?

Of course she doesn't. She wants fake reviews, and added the rest to appear somewhat genuine. All she really wanted was lots of fake, glowing, 5 star reviews. Like the fake 5 star she already has

Marquis - (I'm going to assume you are a man because the title Marquis is masculine) but i have to ask in all honesty, are you dyslexic? I am and as an author, it's a real pain in the butt. I just don't see the faults and problems in my work and even after my editor proofs it, i usually discover (or am told about) some she missed; nobody's perfect. that doesn't mean that i scream, shout and call people who point them out "rude". Yes, I am defensive when it comes to grammar and spelling, because i have spent my life not being able to do what others find simple but the simple fact is, i need help. My spelling and grammar suck. That's the truth and as much as it pains me, i cant deny the truth, especially not if i want to be a successful author (which i am, BTW, i make my living this way now).

Even posting on this forum, I have a spelling and grammar checker program. It's not 100% but it's better than what i used to post before I had such tools.

The first reply you received here from 1001 was perfectly civil, just not dressed up or sugar coated. This is a profession for many of us here, and we don't have time to hold hands. You see we do have lives; we also have more books to write, fans to reply to, publicity to do, cover images to proof, that's aside from partners, school runs, second jobs, friends, taxes and the 101 other things that keep people busy. We post here because we're basically a nice lot and want to help people starting out on the same journey that we have been through. No one's response to you was rude or unkind, until you threw a hissy fit because you can't take criticism.

Your efforts have backfired because you now have 3 fake reviews; one fake 5 and two fake 1 stars. Not exactly a successful foray into this forum.

I understand that you love your book but right now, you are the only person who loves it. I suggest that you act on some of the advice here, if you want to publish a book that others will also love.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 1:34 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Really trying to compare me to a kid.

Actually, I wasn't comparing you to a kid. My kids write better. And have fewer tantrums.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 2:04 PM   in response to: andresanthomas in response to: andresanthomas
 
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Again all of have crazy perceptions. Susan I know you're smarter than that I mean there might be a few females in this world who are named marquis but that's a small chance. And stop assuming that I'm in denial because I never was to begin with. If you all realize what criticism is then you so called no angry writers would not be here, jumping in without understanding the situation.

You all are not Gods so don't sit here and lecture me on how wrong I am when you don't understand.

Use your words more wisely.

FYI review was actually from a real person. Really you all are taking your imaginative minds to another level... Lol

Edited by: Marquis Mills on May 9, 2013 2:15 PM

Marquis Mills

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Posted: May 9, 2013 2:14 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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Let me break in down for you " snowflake people"

You criticize the book and not the writer.

Questioning my gender is not professional you frantic woman(SUSAN).

And you do this when you've read the ENTIRE story.

Don't jump on the wagon without first knowing where it is going because all you insurgents are touched in the head.

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Okay, guys and dolls. I suggest that we all discontinue participating in this thread, as Marquis knows best and as sunk to simply insulting all of us.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 2:17 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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And stop assuming that I in denial because I never was to begin with.

Your book and your blurb are riddled with errors. When even a dyslexic like me can spot them, they must be bad. The errors are a fact. You are attempting to deny that fact, therefore, you are in denial.

If you all realize what criticism is then you so called no angry writers would not be here, jumping in without understanding the situation.

You came to us and asked if your book was good. You just got pissy when we pointed out the errors.

Having read this thread from the beginning, what exactly am i failing to understand? Are you having telepathic conversations with some forum members that us non-telepaths just can't grasp? Using a hidden code (perhaps that's the reason for all the errors) or perhaps you are using semaphore to communicate outside these boards?

You all are not Gods so don't sit here and lecture me on how wrong I am when you don't understand.

No, I'm not a god, but i am a bestselling, self-published author. Maybe, just maybe, there's something that you could learn from someone like me?

Use your words more wisely.

Use your time more wisely, I would suggest that finding an editor or proofreader would be more beneficial than throwing a temper tantrum here.

FYI review was actually from a real person. Really you all are taking your imaginative minds to another level... Lol

And you are insulting my intelligence. You came here begging for fake reviews and have stated more than once, that you don't expect us to buy the book. IE, review something we haven't read. That's the very definition of a fake review. Added to that, the review is not a verified purchase, uses similar language to you, has errors very similar to the ones you make here (and in your book and blurb) and the final nail in the coffin, it's the only review that reviewer has ever left. Do you seriously expect us to believe that your mediocre, error riddled book, moved a regular amazon user to leave their first ever review? My birthday is tomorrow, not yesterday.

There's an old saying,"when you're in a hold, stop digging". You need to stop shoveling crap onto people who are trying to help you improve your book and start paying attention to what we are saying.

One day I'll look back at this and wonder why I gave any of my time to a nobody like you, but i actually do understand how hard it is to pour your soul into something, and feel devastated when the flaws are pointed out. That doesn't make us a bunch of meanies, that means that you need to suck it up and take our advice, or settle for one or two sales a year, and a high return rate.

The choice is yours.
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Posted: May 9, 2013 2:37 PM   in response to: gldrummond in response to: gldrummond
 
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(This is NOT aimed at Gayla, she's just the most convenient to hit 'reply' to, if this even goes through)

I see some are leaving 'fake' reviews on his book. I know, I know, you're basing it off what you see in the Look Inside and such. Regardless of my personal feelings about the ethical implications of such reviews, targeting someone because of their behavior on the forums, I wanted to point out THIS:

When people gang up on someone in cases such as this, the subsequent lack of sales will be blamed on those reviews. There will be no epiphany that perhaps, indeed, the book needs revision or editing, because it will always be blamed on the bad reviews left by angry people. Any subsequent, 'real' negative review will be brushed off as just another person joining the swarm.

Now, I realize those leaving the review could give a tinker's d*mn and perhaps this author will never have such an epiphany, but I just wanted to point out that in leaving those malicious reviews, all you are doing is allowing someone to shift the blame for lack of performance to YOU.

I'm not looking to have a flame war or start an argument with anyone, I'm just pointing out that while I bet you enjoyed leaving those reviews, what purpose do they serve? Will he listen any better when the comments are as reviews? Do you think Kindle users are too stupid to ascertain quality without your two cents bout obvious things?

At the end of the day, such reviews do nothing but feed erroneous egos.
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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 3:09 PM   in response to: 2davidvandyke in response to: 2davidvandyke
 
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David:

Booknookbiz and others: Pearls before swine, baby.

Yes. It's unfortunate. I've debated on whether to alert Amazon to the book(s) (yes, he has another one up for purchase that is just as bad), because I think it's possible that he's (quite a bit) underage, given his extremely irrational responses and disproportionately angry replies. He obviously doesn't understand, literally, what we're saying. He may even be dyslexic, which might explain some of the issues. (Of course, that doesn't mean he can't write a book; it just means that he literally can't see the numerous errors.) He'd probably benefit from text-to-speech to "hear" the problems. I don't think we should burst his bubble of grandiosity by telling him about posters here like Colleen Hoover, on the NYTimes Bestseller list, and others like her who post here with some regularity. He apparently hasn't realized that most of the people who replied to him are actually very successful self-published authors, unlike him. I mean, in his first post, he literally asked "Is it any good?," and apparently, he didn't really want the answer to that question. {shrug}. He wanted reviews; I see that now he got what he asked for, after his behavior here. This is one of those guys that will end up on the "Authors Behaving Badly" lists, I fear. It was stupid of me to reply, as I once posted on this forum, and in one of my guest-blog posts, that the people who come here and ask that question don't want the answer, and invariably, the answer will be "no, it's not," because if someone has to ask that question here, it means that they never had any proofreading, never had an editor, didn't have beta readers and didn't use a critique group, never took a writing class, ad infinitum, which means that it's highly unlikely that their writing will be any good at all. They haven't practiced it that magical 10,000 hours yet. Nor developed the rhino-hide needed for surviving critiques.

In any event...not my problem. For all we know, this is the nth incarnation of You-Know-Who, trying to waste everyone's time here. I'm done, I have learned my lesson about posting here at the KDP, once and for all. Nice to "see" you David--I see that those sales are still perking along nicely! (Waves at David). Bye!

Over and out,

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Marquis Mills

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 3:52 PM   in response to: Susan in response to: Susan
 
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Susan, you have a lot of problems that needs treatment.

Maybe you should seek help?

Having this perception that I'm angry and claimed to be a woman is not going to fix your personal problems ( wondered where that came from?).

Seek help before its too late!!!!

You and your buddies who posted fake reviews for my book to make me look bad is only going to get me ,publicity.

Do you have a man in your life?
You seem uptight. Should you go see a shrink?
Is Jenny Craig in your life? Having Suicidal thoughts?

You're rambling....stop it :)
The flaunt your best seller crap because it does nothing for me but make you a idiot for posting long responses.

First off where did you come from, you just jumped in a conversation from out of nowhere. You say these things because you know that you are safe in your cozy home,miles away.Dont say things you would not say in person, you sound funny doing it. Take your meds poor things because someone is bipolar and suffers from personality disorders too...

Dyslexia is not the only...

Tisk....So touched in the head....may someone help you sweetie :(

Susan

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 3:54 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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You criticize the book and not the writer.

That's exactly what 1001 did, point out flaws in your book. He didnt insult you as a person. Saly, you all too quickly made your own character flaws very obvious.

Questioning my gender is not professional you frantic woman(SUSAN).

Do you even know what 'frantic' means?

And FYI, I didn't "question" your gender.

Marquis isn't actually a name, it's a title, so since you have adopted a fake name, I am unable to tell your sex from your name. In order not to offend you by referring to you as a man if you were in fact a woman, i explained my reasoning. I was taught that assumptions are bad, which is why i wanted you to know why I made that assumption. I could refer to you in gender neutral pronouns if you would like, zie or zir.

You clearly assume that i think only women whine, complain and moan at people who tell them the truth, just because it's unpleasant, which is why you believe i have insulted you by "questioning" your gender. If you think that's what I think of women, then you are the sexist one. Men are no more or less capable of being drama queens than women are.

The fact is, whether you are male, female, transgender, animal, vegetable or mineral, your book has serious problems that you need to address.

Don't jump on the wagon without first knowing where it is going because all you insurgents are touched in the head.

Insurgents ? Sorry but there are no rebels or revolutionaries here, just authors with a shed load more experience of self-pubbing that you have.
Marquis Mills

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 4:03 PM   in response to: booknookbiz in response to: booknookbiz
 
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Ignorance should be a theme for you all....better yet....have it as a tattoo.

Except for those and they know who they are.

I'm going to put it this way...

I win and you lose!!!!

You so called professionals get angry just like anyone else and are sabotaging me.

How can that be professional?

Unethical should be another tattoo you all should get.

Susan

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 4:03 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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I call troll!

Stop engaging people, we are dealing with Gabe/Ricard/fskid/etc's long lost twin or soul mate, back to cause havoc.

My god man, what a small life you must lead, to spend so much time and effort coming back here and picking fights with strangers.

I'm off, and not speaking to this time waster again.
2davidvandyke

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 4:51 PM   in response to: Susan in response to: Susan
 
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Sales will tell.

Oh, sorry. "Sells." .
sued2

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 4:51 PM   in response to: notjohn in response to: notjohn
 
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KDP was good to us. It's KDP Select that is going to have him paying off with a penance for a long, long, long, long, long, long time.
Peter Elliott

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 9, 2013 5:00 PM   in response to: Marquis Mills in response to: Marquis Mills
 
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+1

please no one else reply to this thread - we are being trolled

I am still unsure whether this troll is the same person as Edison - the writing style is the same (although Edison may have been his Dr Jekyll - much more polite and less mental illness evident)
Msgris

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 10, 2013 2:56 AM   in response to: Kara Haskins in response to: Kara Haskins
 
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Forum tourettes!

Edited by: Msgris on May 10, 2013 3:41 AM
Msgris

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Posted: May 10, 2013 3:11 AM   in response to: Kara Haskins in response to: Kara Haskins
 
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There's nothing fake about my review. I actually made the effort to buy the book and ridiculous as it may seem made the effort to try and read it (which was damn near impossible!). Marquis asked for a review so I gave an honest one. I am a verified purchaser! So get your facts right before making assumptions.
Malcolm Higgins

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 10, 2013 3:28 AM   in response to: Peter Elliott in response to: Peter Elliott
 
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I agree. Let's stop this. We've all tried to help him. He doesn't want to listen.
Hopefully he will find some Colouring Books and Crayons to occupy his time.
You never know, his family and friends might even take a look; if he colours them in nicely.
Marquis Mills

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 14, 2013 5:42 AM   in response to: Malcolm Higgins in response to: Malcolm Higgins
 
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DO NOT BELIEVE those reviews posted for my book. They are not true and have been made to make me look bad.

Don't condone to childish behavior.

Read the book yourself and you will see!
lwards

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Re: I need a Review for "Island of Yoi"
Posted: May 14, 2013 5:19 PM   in response to: 1001nightspress in response to: 1001nightspress
 
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LOL :)
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