I put a lot of effort into hitting a quality bar I'd set and I'm really proud with the end result. Both in terms of formatting and the work itself. I'd rather not give a rundown of anything here and see what you get from the page and samples to make sure I've got it on point.
This being my first time I figured it wouldn't hurt to see what you guys think at a glance. I'm judging my baby after all, so I'm likely to be biased.
The blurb was the hardest part, blew my mind how so few words could make 100,000 look easy.
I also wondered how you guys handle promotion. Are there any tips you can give?
I actually built a list of every blog I could find with Fantasy reviews and spent a long night sending introductory mails and requesting reviews. Felt like a solid way to hit the genre, which is really based on word of mouth.
I'll take a look over your links and put Book Bub on the longterm list.
Fantastic cover! The cover alone should help sell a a good quantity. The title and blurb are great too and the only thing letting it down so far is that the Look Inside is not yet working (seems to be a delay for lots of books published in the last few days). I said it already but I really do love the cover. I am even going to download a sample in lieu of the Look Inside not working, just down to the strength of the cover alone, Kudos to whoever designed it for you!
The cover is great -- nicely done. I think the blurb is too long, though it's got some good writing in it. But in this genre, I think you're better served by something briefer and punchier. Of course, since it's fantasy, you do need to sketch in your world at least a little bit, but your blurb doesn't do much of that. Also, the spacing is off. I'd get rid of the big gaps.
Here's a sketch of a shorter version:
Heroes are not forged, but born. The wanderer, Rayle, stands against the preternatural forces lurking on the edges of civilization and sanity. In the bleak lands of the Wrack, he rescues Bray from brutal men. Swearing to help the boy seek vengeance for the death of his brothers, Rayle finds himself locked in a savage contest that tests both his strength of arms and will.
Here's where some world-description might go, but I'd keep it brief. Something about the Younger Union and the Sane King, and how tyranny shows itself.
Well, I'm pleased to say that the sample is every bit as good as the cover and blurb. You've just got one of your first customers. I've just rented it with my Prime membership. I was waiting for a worthy book to save my one book a month rental.
I have to work tomorrow and was about to go to sleep but had to jump back here to congratulate you on your talent. With the right promotion and with a little bit of luck, I can see you going great places with your writing career. I'm only on the first chapter but if the rest of the book holds up to the impressive first impressions (and I intuit it will), then your readers are in for treat.
I'm very impressed. You've really inspired me. Great stuff.
I agree with the others - your cover is fantastic. I'm not a big epic fantasy reader, but I was convinced enough to download the sample from the cover alone.
As for the blurb, it's good, too, but there seems to be extra spacing between paragraphs. I'd look into it so people get as many of your words as possible on that first page without having to click "read more."
Great work and good luck. I can't offer promotion advice because I'm a newbie too, but it seems like you're well on your way!
I've spent many years not being afraid of feedback, because that's how you improve, but worried I would disappoint people who told me to do it. I'm really glad you enjoyed the sample and I hope you enjoy the rest. Have an awesome weekend.
I'll also get on top of fixing those paragraph breaks on the blurb.
I came by just to say that I LOVE your cover!
This isn't a genre I would usually read, but damn that cover.. it draws me in!
The only downside I have with you 'salespage' is that the blurb, even though very well done, (yes, blurbs can be a hell of a lot harder than the actual book!), the triple space in between, at first had me going 'urgh!" because it seems a lot longer than it actually is, and it almost made me skip over it.
Curiously, I couldn't see the one review you'd gotten, as well as not seeing the Look Inside.
But I agree with the previous comments, great cover, take the extra space out of the blurb (that may be a little longer than needed).
At the moment, your best promotion is through social media, telling everyone you know about the book, setting up a website, etc. Wait for the paid and third-party promotions until you've been published a while (and don't bother making your book free--it doesn't work any more if it's your only one).
You're off to a strong start, with sales ranked around 50k. This puts you, at least for the moment, in the top 2% of all ebooks on Amazon. Good luck, and welcome to KDP!
Look inside is delayed for a lot of people from what I've seen. Should show up in a few days.
I'm actually quite glad the review isn't there in honesty. A friend who read the book before I launched went all in when he saw I'd put it out. He was honest and really up front about what he liked.
That said, I'd hate for anyone to think he was shilling. He's a non-native speaker and very flowery.
Great advice there, I've built a pretty strong network ahead of time so I'm waiting on reviews to go up which should give people confidence to give it a shot. Word of mouth is your best friend in my experience for anything. It doesn't matter what I say, it matters what your friends and people you trust say.