Personally I'd argue keep the Anglicisms (I would say that, I'm English ) because otherwise the book isn't authentic. Some of the more specific ones I ditch (it helps to have an American beta reader!) e.g. 'halfway up the M6' just got changed to 'halfway home' in my latest book (although the US authors just expect this side of the pond to understand what it means when a character's driving up the I-90!). Although I have just noticed that you've changed the wording in the blurb on the US / UK sites - clever.
The blurb I do feel needs a little bit of work, the short sentences at the beginning don't help it flow and make it more difficult for a reader to get into. People generally skim the blurb only giving it the barest of attention so you need a first line that hooks them instantly and pulls them into the rest of it. "Sixteen-year old Aaron Connor's life is going nowhere when he decides to embark on an epic journey around the UK." That sort of thing.
And, as an aside, [i]Essex, London, Edinburgh, Gloucester, Buckinghamshire[/i], why three cities and two counties? Why not all counties or all cities?
That being said, your sales clearly aren't terrible, so I think maybe your expectations were higher. Like I said before, for most of us this isn't a get-rich-quick scheme. Some people have phenomenal overnight success but they're the exceptions, not the rule. Just remember, though, that it costs you nothing to list your book on Amazon, or anywhere else for that matter. It can sit there for the next fifty years (amazon gods willing...) and even it it only makes you a tenner a month it adds up in time. You're 19, you've got years ahead of you yet. And remember the best marketing tool of all: [i]write more books[/i].
Sixteen year-old Aaron Connor is fed up of being called Scum. He has only one lousy qualification and is highly unemployable.What does he do? Does he sit around like everyone else and drink his life away? No! He gets on his Motorbike with his girlfriend Lizzie and embark on a mission of good will. They decide to travel across the United Kingdom and help as many people as they can. They want to change the way that people think about modern teenagers.
Join Aaron and Lizzie on their road trip across Great Britain. They go to The Edinburgh Fringe Festival, have a spot of clay pigeon shooting with a Lord and help a rock band during their nation wide tour to name a few. They touch the hearts of everyone they come across and meet many friends along the way
Be ready to be swept away on Aaron's bike in this feel-good story of love, self discovery and the quest for enlightenment.
As Aaron would say:
"I'm buzzing, this is gonna be well good!"
I hope you are feeling better with all the replies.
I was recently given good advice from people on this forum, when I too was fustrated with my sales. That advice was to take another look at your Blurb. I did not check yours out, but I know personally I put so much time into my book that by the time a short blurb was needed I did not give it enough thought or time. Blurb and covers sell for new authors. It helped me when I changed my blurb, hope it helps you!
#1) you are published. Here on Amazon. #2) Go write another book. #3) Go write a third book. and so on. Also, I think you need to get out more--no pubs, take a walk in the sunshine.
We all get down; just stay away from guns for a while. Wouldn't it be terrible is you killed yourself just before your book won a Pulitzer? That's what happened to one author.
I like the blurb you just wrote there. It's got me intrigued about the book.
Also, today I got my first new review in a while and it's a scathing one-star that says something like: "Terrible writing, dumb stories." The opinion goes on to include that I have used a gimmick to perpetrate a fraud on my readers.
A couple weeks ago that review would have killed me. Today it actually made me laugh. I laughed because it's relatively close in proximity to a five-star review that says "I wish there were more!". And I laughed because the one-star reviewer bought the $10 paperback instead of the 99 cent e-book. (Much harder to return and much greater profit margin for me). Then I laughed at the stupidity of mankind and embraced its diversity. My reviews are a constant cycle of hate/love/hate/love.
And my book only started selling in any kind of substantial numbers two weeks before Christmas. Before that, it took me from August through the end of November (yes, four months) to accumulate enough sales to receive my first ever $15 payout from Amazon.
People on this forum have taught me about thick skin, patience, extreme highs and lows, and not to give into the urge to respond to bad reviews. Now I hope I am teaching you what they taught me. There are good people here so don't off yourself. It helps to remember once in a while, too, that before we turned this into a business, writing was just something we all loved to do. Keep that in mind and it shows in your work.
Good luck and post here often. With all the time zones, there's always someone around.
P.S. I think your slang glossary is a pretty cool idea.
Dude, I checked your author blurb. You're 19. Even Stephen King didn't sell a novel until he was 25. Seriously, take the advice on here and keep working on it. Don't give up. I started submitting short stories to magazines when I was 18 and it took me nine years to make a sale, eleven before I sold to a pro magazine. You're ahead of the game already. The book of previously published short stories that I've put up has sold 8 copies, four of them to people I know. It's pretty pathetic but I'm not worrying about it. Just keep working on your writing and keep trying to improve. And one more time, DON'T GIVE UP!
When you do get reviews, they'll be better if you go through and have someone fix your punctation, particularly around dialogue.
You can now consider yourself no longer ignored.
I'm sure Dr. Phil must air over in England. He has a phrase he uses often. "You have to do it UNTIL..." As in, you have to promote your book UNTIL it gets where you want it to be. However long that takes. Not for a day or two, or a week or two, or a month or two. Until.
Keep slugging. It sounds like you've got a good story to tell. I enjoyed the preview (expect of course for the proofing).
I just bought your book because the sample really lured me in.
Here's a tip: I bought mine through the US site, which makes sense because that's where I am, and I noticed you hadn't copied your tags from the UK site. Amazon doesn't do that automatically so if you copy and paste your tags to all the other countries, that may help.
You may be tempted to skip the "other language" areas of Amazon - but don't! Copy and paste there, too. I've been amazed at how many of my sales have been in non-English speaking countries. Then as a cool side note, you get to brag that you're an internationally published author. LOL. (Hey, we have to make our own ego boosts sometimes).
I am going to reply but since so many have I'm wondering if my two cents worth will mean much.
First, this is the first time I have seen you post in the forum. I usually spend about an hour a day here reading from other authors, getting advice and doing my best to give it, though I have only been published for about a month.
Most of the people you meet here are Wonderful and so very helpful. If I ever get stuck or bogged down by emotion I come here. I will read helpful threads and even though the participants are not talking directly to me when helping others, I take everything they say to heart. I have learned more on here than I have anywhere else about writing and publishing and it helps keep my pushing through.
There really isn't much I can add here about your blurb or your book cover that hasn't already been cover. But I will repeat what has been posted: You are not alone!
Keep your chin up, the world is more interesting with you IN it, never forget that
I'm going to respond to your initial post and pretend I've not see the others. One of the biggest mistakes of being young is to get a sense of selfworth from the behavior of how you see the world reacting to you. Before you can grow and acquire the internal fortitude to handle all that life dishes out you must first learn to like yourself. Just because your book doesn't sell doesn't mean you are the problem. You're nineteen and a work in progress. Failure is a valuable lesson that helps provide us with strength to overcome obsticles. Those who never fail, crumble at the first real problem.
Your destiny lies in really taking a hard look at what you want to be, not who you currently are. Once you have that vision firmly in your mind, that's what you work to become. If you try to get your self esteen from others you're in a lose-lose situation. The world is not always nice and one of the hardest things most people have trouble with is giving and receving compliments. Be who you want to be and quit worrying about everyone else's opinion.
It's remarkable how the world changes before your eyes when that happens. My prayers and good wishes are for you this day. Good luck.