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Swati Gupta

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Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 19, 2017 7:16 AM
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Thanks a lot for reading this post.

I am super excited....Published a book on diversity.
This is about Diwali (Festival of Lights, One of the most important Hindu Festival).
Our activity book is for kids ( 6-10 year old).

Looking for feedback from fellow authors on the book title, coverpage, description and maybe content (in case you have the Amazon Select account).
Here is the link to my book https://www.amazon.com/Diwali-Special-Stories-Festivals-Mythologies-ebook/dp/B075LKXQ7P

Let me know what you think?

Thanks a lot!

Edited by: Swati Gupta on Oct 19, 2017 8:21 AM
Salamander Mall...

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Re: Launched a Book on Diversity- Any feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 19, 2017 7:20 AM   in response to: Swati Gupta in response to: Swati Gupta
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Nice cover, but it's not about diversity. Your Look Inside is unreadable. You're not supposed to market your books here, per forum rules.
Swati Gupta

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Re: Launched a Book on Diversity- Any feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 19, 2017 7:32 AM   in response to: Salamander Mall... in response to: Salamander Mall...
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Thanks for the reply.
Sorry, if my post seemed like a promotional post...the intent is to get feedback so we can make it better.

Thanks for pointing out about the LITB...We did updated the book content but seems like the LITB has not got updated....Time to log a ticket with KDP.

Edited by: Swati Gupta on Oct 19, 2017 7:33 AM
Mrs Julia Evans

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 19, 2017 11:48 AM   in response to: Swati Gupta in response to: Swati Gupta
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I can only see two pages, so as much as I expect I could be more brutal if I had the whole book, I'm not prepared to pay $2.64 for the pleasure.

The first line after 'Diwali' is grammatically incorrect.

It should read;

Do you know why festivals and celebrations are so special?

Not;

You know why festival and celebration are so special?

Oh, and half of your reviews look fake - written by people who've never reviewed anything else, or never reviewed any other books. Plus they virtually all sound the same.

If you need anything else, you know where we are.

J
C. Gold

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 19, 2017 8:57 PM   in response to: Mrs Julia Evans in response to: Mrs Julia Evans
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I didn't think the reviews looked fake. They looked written by Indian people, but that makes sense since the book is about Indian stories. Most talk about their kids and how they used the book or the code.

To the OP:

I think you need to get an editor to go through your book content. Things like:

... Or prepare to lose your weapon and men, ... (the plural form 'weapons' needs to be used here). Mrs. Julia Evans already mentioned the other issue I saw in there.

Also the blurb has:
... parents with help of early childhood... (could use the article 'the' so it says ... parents with THE help of early childhood...)

These are mistakes a non-native English speaker makes and can be flushed out by hiring someone to go through and find the others.

The cover is actually vibrant and seems pretty appropriate for the content.
Swati Gupta

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 20, 2017 8:18 PM   in response to: Mrs Julia Evans in response to: Mrs Julia Evans
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Hello Mrs. Julia,
I am so very glad that I asked for a brutal review....the stuff that you have pointed out is exactly what we need to identify, weed out and refine our offering.
You are spot on that we have grammatical issues and it is kind of embarrassing that it is right there on the first page itself....thanks for pointing it out.

I would love to somehow get a copy of my product in your.,,,just do not know how(?)
Would you please do us a favor and share your contact details so I can send you a copy.
You could email me at Hello@************.com or message me through fb (https://www.facebook.com/CultureDabba)

Thanks once again for your help :-)

If you or other author over here on the forum have some additional feedback then please do share.

Regards
Gupta

Edited by: KDP Moderate on Oct 21, 2017 3:10 AM
Swati Gupta

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 20, 2017 8:23 PM   in response to: C. Gold in response to: C. Gold
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Hello Mr. Gold,
Yes, we surely need an editor and would love to connect if someone in this forum can help(?)
Thanks for your words of encouragement.

Mr. Gold: I would love to somehow get a copy of my product in your.,,,just do not know how(?)
Would you please do us a favor and share your contact details so I can send you a copy.
You could email me at Hello@************.com or message me through fb (https://www.facebook.com/CultureDabba)

Regards
Gupta

Edited by: KDP Moderate on Oct 21, 2017 3:10 AM
Mrs Julia Evans

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 21, 2017 4:13 AM   in response to: Swati Gupta in response to: Swati Gupta
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Gupta,

I'm glad I was able to help with your error, but with respect, I'm an author, and, moreover, one who's in the middle of editing her own 600 page book. So while I'm happy to come on here and kill half an hour taking a break from my own work, I don't have the time to provide a free editing service for you.

Actually, not only do I not have the time, I no longer have the inclination either.

I tried that once with a young Indian chap I knew couldn't afford to have the translation done properly. To cut a long story short, the person in question turned out to be less interested in producing a book of some quality, than in making a fast buck. They b*stardised the work I'd spent days doing, just so they could create a horrendous 'western' version of their story, which they went ahead and published, despite my unequivocal assertion that it was a terrible mistake.

Lesson learned.

I wish you well with your book, and for what it's worth, you showed great courage putting it out there for the community to pick holes in. Well, courage or foolishness... I'm not entirely sure which. (You'll notice your e-mail address has been moderated out, btw. NOT a good idea to put those details out in the community.)

I'll be happy to respond to any future posts, but only on an ad-hoc basis.

Best wishes. J
C. Gold

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 21, 2017 10:55 PM   in response to: Swati Gupta in response to: Swati Gupta
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I recommend going to http://www.kboards.com and looking at their yellow pages for editors. You can also browse the forums to find which editors people have had good success with and use one of those. A professional will cost you money, but their job is to flush out grammar issues. I'm good at finding them instinctively, but what bandwidth I have is already devoted to a small group of author friends who swap books to one another to find issues like this.
10blade

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Oct 22, 2017 1:01 PM   in response to: Swati Gupta in response to: Swati Gupta
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Dear Gupta,

I can't offer you a brutal review because the little I can see in Look Inside is pretty decent. Two things that jumped out at me:

1. The blond moustaches of the men on the cover make them look like Vikings. Not the kind of diversity you were looking for, I'm sure.
2. This line in the description is confusing: "Designed from scratch by American parents..." I take it they live in America, but it would be important to mention their cultural background as that is what qualifies them to write this book.

All the best to you,

Veronica
Swati Gupta

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Re: Looking for brutal feedback from fellow authors
Posted: Nov 9, 2017 8:31 PM   in response to: 10blade in response to: 10blade
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Thanks Veronica for the feedback.
I was traveling and did not get a chance to look through this thread, sorry for the delay from my side to respond.

We got the LITB fixed and now it is showing most of the pages.
Good point about the mustaches, will see if I can get the illustration tweaked.
'Designed from scratch by American parents', yup we got some other similar feedback, we need to update the description.

Thanks once again for your feedback.

Regards
Gupta
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