I glanced briefly at your book. The price of $2.99 is too high for 30 pages by an unknown. You might get some sales at 99c.
But be aware that self-help books by unknown authors without credentials (for example a PhD in psychology) sell extremely poorly. If you want to sell a lot of books, you have to publish in a genre that readers are looking for.
The English in the blurb seemed OK.
Sorry. Realistically most KDP books hardly ever sell at all.
Subhendu Sen wrote:
I'm looking for your honest opinions about the cover, blurb and price of the book. You have the liberty to be harsh, if you wish so. But I'll not react adversely - that's a promise.
Looking forward to your opinions...
Hmm... we'll see if you still feel the same way after 20 replies....
I'll kick this off with a health warning - I don't read inspirational, get-rich-quick, secret to success, or spiritually uplifting books. EVER! That's a matter of personal preference. Nor do I like short books - again, my personal preference.
However, as you asked, I glanced at your pamphlet in order to provide you with feedback. These are simply my thoughts - others will have their own.
Cover: The image is fine, and appropriate, but the font you've used for the words 'Success Mantra' is awful. You want to deliver a serious message, I assume? Then use a traditional font, not something that would look better on a comic.
Blurb: Lacks appropriate punctuation - for example - 'this book helps the reader to find out his real objectives and guides him step-by-step to write his own mantra to achieve success' is missing commas, and would read better as - 'this book helps the reader to find out his real objectives, and guides him, step-by-step, to write his own mantra to achieve success....'.
You also use 'lifecycle' where 'lifetime' would be more appropriate (imho).
Also, 'steps include to take care of your body, brain, mind and soul', would read better as 'steps include taking care of your body, brain, mind and soul...'.
Finally, '...a great goal-setting guideline to the people who are looking for achieving success in life' should be reworded. '...a great goal-setting guide, for people who are looking to achieve success in life'.
Look Inside: Your comment that you've trimmed the book down to save on trees is, quite frankly, hogwash! It's an e-book! There's no paper version. That just sounds to me that you were too lazy to do the job properly. As to your claim that you made it 'short and precise to make it affordable'... Seriously? Do you think your readers are stupid? Be honest... there are only so many things you can say about creating a Mantra. At 30 pages, my guess is that you've already overstretched things. I would take both comments out.
The rest of your content I'm not going to comment on, as it would be unfair. Your book is not my 'cup of tea' as they say, so I'm not even going to begin to offer an opinion on your writing. Other than the few words I picked out, the English is to a better standard than most of the books we see here, and it's been edited fairly well.
You do, however, need to work on the grammar, as once again, you have a shortage of commas in some sentences. This makes it appear as though you and your editing partner took it in turns to edit a sentence, and only one of you understood what to do with a comma.
Oh, and the price in the UK is £1.99 in the UK - which tells me you've gone for Amazon's 70% option, so Dale is probably right about the .com price as well. That's why you have no sales. It's way too high!
Let me clarify what concerns me most about your comment is price. When I see, it's $0.76 in the US, but, £1.99 in the UK., I'm surprised. Maybe, your point of selecting 70% is the issue. I will check on that. Thanks for that.
As far as the commas are concerned - English is not my mother tongue, nor the editor's. I believe in commas, but she doesn't much. By the way, she's my wife - so you, being a wife of someone, understand my problem. If I get stuck with commas, I may face a full stop somewhre in between! :P
Other corrections that you suggested, I will definitely correct those. Thanks again.
Rest of what you said about the content of the book - which is not your "cup of tea" - is okay. No genre is for everyone.
Thanks for your positive input Ma'am! That was a great help.
Regarding your price, I'm looking at the com site now, and it says $2.52, to which, presumably, sales tax is added. I'm in the UK.
With regard to the problem of the commas... I understand that the problem may be bigger than a disagreement between co-editors! We're talking about marital harmony here! Far be it for me to cause any domestic strife!
However, I think your beloved has to realise that it's for the good of your book to get things right.
I didn't want to make any assumptions earlier as to whether English was your first language, but as you've said it's not, can I say that this is probably in the top five, maybe, of all the translated works I've seen paraded before the community.
It really is very good (albeit needing a few tweaks and a few more commas!).
There have been a number of other authors here recently who've tried to pass off some atrocious translations as 'acceptable' work, and I'd happily hold your book up to them as an example of how it should be done.
So while I don't hold out much hope for vast numbers of sales (that's down to the genre not your efforts), I wish you much success.
(And FWIW, if you have to use persuasion with your wife... chocolates are never a bad thing! Just saying...! )
The price is very clearly $2.99 in the US. If it's less in India, it's because Indian prices are always lower. If you want it to be 99c in the US, the lowest price, you'll have to choose 35% royalties and enter 99 cents as the price. Different markets can, however, have different prices. Good luck!
This is one of the better looking covers to come on this forum. Though I agree, the font used for Success Mantra is better served for comedy.
What is Success? This section appears to state the obvious in some cases, like opposite of success is failure. It was also a little repetitive, probably to extend the book even though you said earlier you were keeping it trim. I like your idea of success and fortune, but then you ascribe winning the lottery to a feeling of success when it is really nothing but fortune. I certainly wouldn't feel like a success if I won the lottery, even over time as the money lingers in my coffers. I really think you should remove this example.
Horizontal and Vertical Success... You list a few names as legends but I've never heard of these people (sorry legendary Indian people!). You might want to try picking one or two names from other countries to toss in there, like Einstein and Mark Twain, or perhaps offering up a minor explanation of how these people were successful. I also feel like this section is tossed in to extend the book rather than keeping it trim unless this affects what type of mantra you come up with.
Surprisingly, when I check Amazon.com's price for my book, it shows $0.76. I am going to change the percentage to 35% and let's see what happens. The base price I selected, was for Amazon.in (India). That's the minimum price allowed. I thought, it would be converted to other currencies at the same rate.
And, thank you so much for your good words about the book and for your good wishes.
Your suggestion for chocolates is awesome....but, there're so many commas
I'm not sure if Indian writers all think British and American readers will buy every overpriced get-rich-quick pamphlet written by someone nobody ever heard of, but we do see all too many in the forum. And here's yet another, 30 pages of dubious advice for $2.99.
But you asked about cover and blurb:
Cover -- Okay, I suppose, but neither exciting nor suggestive of finance, mantras or success.
Blurb -- I found it muddled; it really didn't entice me to look inside.
As mentioned earlier, I have no idea who you are. There's nothing in the blurb telling us you have any expertise, nor any sort of biography. Why in the world should anyone trust you? Had you researched your genre, you'd have discovered a massive glut of such books, most of them written by credentialed experts or celebrities who have worked hard to make their names powerful marketing tools. By competition, quality, price, recognition and authority you're starting out at a deficit that you may not be able to overcome.