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uncle1282

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First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 3, 2018 9:29 AM
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It came to me last night, and it's all I have. I have often started a novel with the idea for the first sentence.

Mattie died the day the war ended, VJ day, the first day of my war with sorrow, loneliness and loss.
Michael F. Quar...

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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 3, 2018 10:01 AM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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I like it. Makes me want to read on. Now, I want to know who Mattie is, and why the sorrow and loss. So, write the story.
Cynthia E. Hurst

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Posted: Jan 3, 2018 10:06 AM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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Oh, no! You didn't kill off Mattie, did you?
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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 3, 2018 10:11 AM   in response to: Cynthia E. Hurst in response to: Cynthia E. Hurst
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Spoiler!
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This would be book #2 from the romance-mystery, "Quentin and Mattie." It ended with their marriage in 1941. Ideas for the first chapter are still bouncing around in my head and as soon as I have a few more of them, I can draft chapter 1. I write by the seat of my pants, otherwise known as the EL Doctorow method, so I don't want to see too far ahead.
Cynthia E. Hurst

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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 3, 2018 10:22 AM   in response to: B.L. Alley in response to: B.L. Alley
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Well, if the first sentence of the new book refers to her death, I don't think it's exactly a spoiler to know she's going to die. The details will have to wait.
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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 3, 2018 10:22 AM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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"Mattie died the day the War ended. On that day, my war began.

They were kissing in Times Square. Cronkite babbled something on the radio. "Japs quit!" screamed the headlines.

I stood in the crowd, unsmiling and alone."

To every man of that generation, there was only one war -- the War, with a capital "W". Even to the Americans.
B.L. Alley

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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 3, 2018 10:30 AM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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I knew the first line of all five novels when I began writing them.
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Posted: Jan 3, 2018 5:15 PM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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Oh dude, how could you kill Mattie off. To counter this terrible sorrow and loss, I'll brighten your day with my first line:

Eld felt a burst of pure energy, like the sun’s brightest beam through the leafy canopy, racing through the earth.
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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 3, 2018 5:51 PM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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The bloody war had finally ended. But there was no triumph in my heart. Mattie was dead. She left me in the moment of victory. The battle of loneliness and sorrow without her now faced me, worse than any other pain in this world.

Just a thought, though I like yours.
Cynthia E. Hurst

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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 4, 2018 12:07 AM   in response to: Moshe Ben-Or in response to: Moshe Ben-Or
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I like this, except to say that I doubt Cronkite ever 'babbled'. I remember his coverage of JFK's assassination.
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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 4, 2018 9:24 AM   in response to: C. Gold in response to: C. Gold
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Sounds like Thomas Wolfe.
uncle1282

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Posted: Jan 4, 2018 9:28 AM   in response to: resteasy in response to: resteasy
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Who's writing this novel? I'm not sure why some feel compelled to add, revise, rewrite or compose totally my opener. Maybe you should write the rest of the book.

My idea is to move Quentin from the big city to wander eastward, and fall into a job which quickly promotes him to the chief of police in a small town. That's where the story really begins. The move eastward is still in my head. I have but a half page written now and will add to it what jells in my imagination.

How does a man whose whole world suddenly ends make a new start and slough off joy and grief from his past?
B.L. Alley

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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 4, 2018 10:33 AM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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Moshe Ben-Or has a really bad case of self-importance. Hopefully the anti-pretentions will kick in and he will feel better soon.
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Re: First sentence to launch new novel
Posted: Jan 4, 2018 10:35 AM   in response to: uncle1282 in response to: uncle1282
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How does a man whose whole world suddenly ends make a new start and slough off joy and grief from his past?

My mistake. Answer withdrawn.

Edited by: Brad the wronger on Jan 5, 2018 10:02 AM
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