"Young Angus Fraser loses all dear to him and swears a blood oath to avenge his kin. Retired soldier of fortune, Thomas McAnders, befriends the inexperienced young man and agrees to help him on his quest. Angus' difficult task is further complicated by Thomas' beautiful young daughter. Torn between his oath to find the vriej-buit who murdered his family and his growing feelings for Geuselle, Angus sets out on the journey of a lifetime, riding the stormy winds of love and hate to find his destiny. Will love conquer all, or will new lovers be swept away in a tempest?"
Your blurb doesn't flow well the way it is. Try thinking about how you can hook your reader into wanting to know more. Maybe something like: Blood oaths come at a price. One that Angus Fraser is willing to pay to find those that murdered his family. But when a beautiful young woman enters his life, he finds himself torn between his growing love for her and his oath. Will love conquer all? Or will new lovers be swept away in a tempest of love, hate and the stormy winds of destiny?
Try building what you have on something like this.
The wind-swept heights tower above the clan lands of Angus Fraser. His heart is broken and his anger rages as he turns the last shovel of earth on his parent’s final resting place. He swears the blood oath to avenge the slaughter of his kin and with that vow is beholden to kill the vriej-built who murdered his family. But who can help him?
His journey quickly begins as he is swept up in a tempest of love and visceral hate that soon carries him to the new world and a life he had never imagined, his homeland but a distant memory as he now becomes the hunter.
I didn't look at the book, this is simply written off what your blurb contains so it may not match what you wrote but it gives you the idea of what you're going for.
Too many names, too soon...but the plot has potential...
When Angus Fraser loses all that is dear to him, he swears a blood oath to avenge his kin. Along the way Angus falls in love with the beautiful young daughter of a friend sworn to aid him with his oath. Torn between his promise for vengeance and his growing love for Geuselle, Angus sets out on the journey of a lifetime, riding the stormy winds of love and hate to find his destiny.