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mollysnow

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Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 2:00 PM
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I realize I love layering the cheese in some of my scenes. And I'm not talking about the romance; it's the humor. My sense of humor can be sooo cheesy/corny. I can't help myself, though!
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 3:19 PM   in response to: mollysnow in response to: mollysnow
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How's this for cheesy?

A woman asks her husband if he would like some breakfast and he says, "No, I think the Viagra has taken away my appetite."

At lunch time, she asks him again if he is hungry. "No." he replies. "It's the Viagra, I just don't have an appetite."

At dinner it's the same and again his response is a "No". Then the woman says, "Well would you mind letting me up then, I'm starving!" ;)
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 3:33 PM   in response to: sbin59 in response to: sbin59
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Ha! I really didn't expect that punchline : )

By cheese, I mean so silly that it could make people cringe. I've had a reviewer even say they like my "bad" puns. Saying "bad" kind of ruins the compliment, though, don't you think? hehe

I just inserted a scene in my latest work, because my silly side insisted. No matter how much I flip flop back and forth on whether I want it or not, there it remains:

No more than twenty minutes earlier, Idis’s light-headedness went away and she was determined to find her Familiar around the large estate of the castle. To Herman, she insisted she was well and told him to stay behind with the ship. She was sure the faster they both worked on their objectives, the sooner they could fly back to the future. He, of course, eventually obliged and she was off on her hunt. But her hunt soon ended when she easily spotted the only black fur-ball amidst acres of waving grass, having a morning chew of the delicious green blades.

Idis waved her arms and screeched out, “Surla!”

Surla almost gagged in surprise as some grass was halfway down her throat. She swallowed hard and looked in the distance at her witch as if she were a mirage in a desert. Idis?!

As they ran to each other, it was like a happy, hippy song played in their minds. Their swift legs suddenly felt like they were going in slow-motion, as if they were frolicking toward one another, hair and fur rippling majestically in the wind. Surla bounded high above the wild grass until finally leaping up for a hug and Idis’s arms stretched forth to receive her. At the last moment, Idis tripped on a root of a tree stump and instead of receiving Surla in a warm embrace, the witch flattened her cat like a tortilla press to corn meal.

Idis rolled over and lifted Surla by the back of the neck. “What the H-E-Double hockey sticks was that?”

Surla sucked in air before saying, “Thinking back on it, I don’t know which part was most disturbing.”
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 3:46 PM   in response to: mollysnow in response to: mollysnow
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Ha ha! I see what you mean. ;)

I hope I didn't offend you, I've been working on a new erotic short story and my humor can be crude sometimes. I can get pretty silly and well, rather rauncy. I have to watch myself!
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 3:53 PM   in response to: sbin59 in response to: sbin59
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I don't personally check out erotica, but your joke was just fine and made me laugh!
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 3:59 PM   in response to: mollysnow in response to: mollysnow
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Maybe this one is better.

If 3/4 of all accidents happen with a mile of your house what should you do?
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 4:00 PM   in response to: sbin59 in response to: sbin59
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Yes? You've stumped me.
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 4:03 PM   in response to: mollysnow in response to: mollysnow
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Move! LOL

Well, I guess I should get back to writing. :)
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Re: Extra Cheese Please
Posted: Jun 12, 2012 4:05 PM   in response to: sbin59 in response to: sbin59
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:0)

I'll get back to writing, too. Thanks for playing. heheh
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