Honestly daysoldier, you deserve it. I'm half way through and loving the book. You've done a few things I certainly didn't expect. Definitely going to leave a review when I've finished. Probably only going to be a four star though. Your excessive use of the word 'vampire' in every other sentence in the first chapter got to me a bit. Perhaps next time, have them call each other by names and refer to them as such instead of first/second/third vampire.
Unfortunately, I haven't received anything about my book yet, good or bad, except from my mum (being the only one to have read it). Though her review is encouraging. It's not the kind of genre she usually likes and considering her criticisms of books in the past, I think of it to be a great achievement for her to say 'It's not the best book I've read, but it definitely is not the worst'
And thanks for the feedback about the opening scenes. That was actually something I struggled with. My beta readers were fine with it, so I didn't change it. I think next time, I'm going to follow my instincts.
There's a scene in the second novel with some nameless vampires as well. Based on what you're saying, I think I'm going to go back to that scene and give them names.
As for your mom's compliment, I think it's great. Whenever someone reads one of my books, I always say, 'I only want to know one thing: have you ever read a successful book that's worse than mine?"
The best compliments follow three forms. In my war stories, veterans relate on a personal level. In my guide books, people obtain a new career by learning how to overcome the initial roadblocks. The third "compliment" is of course, sales.
I'm selling the same stories over and over. That tells me people are reading one and wanting more and talking to others. That's why I focus my primary efforts on these two genre, although I do have an extensive body of work over an eclectic variety of subjects. I also like the money. The indie rocks!
Vampires and werewolves are noted for keeping a low profile mostly undercover in darkness. We know that teenage girls relate to vampires because of the whole sexual submission thing. Sex sells.
Werewolves mostly tear people limb from limb. The police are usually the last ones to figure it out so the hero does some research and discovers the silver bullet. For some reason, I suppose from the expense, they seldom have more than one shot.
So it's either a bite on the neck or a head torn clean off, but Mary Gingersnap squirms all the same. You've got to get something for your investment in a large Coke as "There's many a slip betwixt a cup and the lip" or "Aim little, hit big!"
Mine was a very flattering review from a stranger on Amazon.
"It's rare I find a writer who can take me where I want to go. I start many books, finish few.
I was reluctant to read this. I didn't really know, of course, what it was fully about and I was afraid of the darkness I might find. And there was darkness. But there was also light. And it was going through the darkness, then entering the light, that made the story whole.
There was something else, a bit hard to describe, that really affected me. I could feel the author's energy very intensely as I read. It was as if he had gripped my shoulders and was hissing the story into my ears. He was going to make sure I heard all of it. I've never run across that before. I could also feel his energy and power in the way he moved his words, which was very, very fast.
I felt my reading of this story was very much a shared experience --- the author and myself. I usually detach when I meet darkness, but feeling that the author was there, with me, guiding me, allowed me to stay focused, fully aware, for the whole ride. And it was a ride.
I think this author has a very special gift. I hope he has a long life and publishes often. "